The world of children’s poetry lost a legend a couple of weeks ago. Lee Bennett Hopkins, author of 120 books and anthologies, poet extraordinaire, and champion of children’s poetry and children’s poets, passed away on August 8.
How does one remember such a man? Jone MacCulloch suggested that we find inspiration in a line of his poetry. Yep–rereading Lee’s wonderful work and creating new poems inspired by them is indeed the perfect tribute, one that I imagine would make Lee smile. You’ll find a list of all the poetry tributes to Lee at The Poem Farm, where Amy is hosting Poetry Friday. And look for links on Twitter marked #DearOneLBH (I recently joined Twitter, and plan to get in the habit of tweeting one of these days.)
I wrote about one of my favorite LBH anthologies, Spectacular Science, when the Poetry Friday community celebrated Lee’s 80th birthday–and included a poem inspired by that anthology. So I went searching for another poem of Lee’s to feature today. I chose “Spring,” from a book that was new to me–Sharing the Seasons: A Book of Poems.
I love the specificity of the first stanza of this poem, and how it puts the reader right in the middle of spring growth. I quickly wrote a draft using those four words as a beginning–but then started dithering about one word. After writing a list of about 30 different options, I came away with two versions that I thought worked reasonably well.
How to choose which to post? One is more specific to the natural cycle of seeds; the other tells what could be the seed of many stories. Hmmm… after more dithering I remembered that this is my blog–I can post them both!
Seed Story
Roots
sprouts
buds
flowers
anchor
grow
seconds
hours
ripen
harden
burst
fling
float
spin
hide til
spring.
–Buffy Silverman, 2019
Or…Version Two!
Seed Story
Roots
sprouts
buds
flowers
anchor
grow
seconds
hours
ripen
harden
burst
sail
float
spin
untold
tale.
–Buffy Silverman, 2019
I hope I’ve captured some of the joy of Lee’s “Spring.” I know his poems will bring joy and inspiration for years to come.
Hi, Buffy. There’s something about ripen/harden/burst/fling that captures the life-force of spring. Love it.
I think I like the first one better, as the ending is more satisfying, but I love the structure and rhythm you created, either way! Well done, Buffy.
I’m thinking both too–together! I do love the untold tale for its little mystery, and the whole tale of Lee’s influence is yet to be told–so I like that spin on it too. Thank you for this polite grab of a Lee-line!
I can’t decide which I like better, either. Both make me glad and make me think. I’m glad you shared both versions!
I’m glad you shared both versions! I can’t decide which I like better, either. Both make me glad and make me think.
Thanks, Kay–glad you enjoyed them.
Both poems. And an extra helping of dithering…the perfect word for the teacher at the end of the first full week of school who didn’t have any time to write but really really wanted to join the party and almost didn’t because she found a cartoon and not a poem and not a line from LBH…I love the word dithering. I may write a poem about it.
Good luck with the new school year, Mary Lee. If I dither so much over a word, can’t imagine the dithering that your teaching entails. The cartoon you shared was perfect.
Thank you so much for sharing not just these poems, but how you came to write them. They are both delightful, but I love your last lines in Seed Story.
Thank you, Cheriee!
Buffy, you planted many seeds with all your dithering. I am partial to Seed Story for its flow and the last line. We have spun many stories here today, all beautiful tributes to Lee. If you are content with your words, I would like to add this poem to my Spring Splendor Gallery. I have fallen behind this year with many interruptions but I do intend to unveil the galleries when I have time to finish the design. Let me know.
Sure, Carol–you’re welcome to include whichever version you prefer in your gallery. Thanks for asking.
Both poems are beautiful. Thanks for sharing them and a little about your process.
And thank you for reading, Rose.
Like others, I like both! As a story-girl, I’m drawn to the second version. If you do submit this–I’d love to know how your dithering changes or keeps the version you choose. My sense of Lee’s work in his own poems and anthologies is that he found brilliance in the short, sweet punch of language. And, these both have that in spades!
Thanks, Linda–I’m probably done with these for now. Yes, I also am partial to short (which is good since I can spend an inordinate amount of time changing and rechanging!)
I agree, both are wonderful. How amazing that just one word on each line can carry so much meaning. I hope you should submit these somewhere!
Thanks, Linda. I think a whole lot more dithering would be involved before submitting…. and probably I would feel too funny about using someone else’s first stanza and then submitting? Not sure how others feel about that, but think I would need to change those words. And I like them!
Good for you for posting both options, Buffy. (Besides, I would hate for all that dithering to be for naught.) Both are lovely tributes to Lee and an interesting lesson for us all to see how different the two poems come across just by replacing a couple of words!
Thanks for encouraging my dithering, Michelle!
I’m glad you posted both, Buffy. Lee loved all kinds of poems as we all know, so looking at seeds in different ways would please him very much. I do love poems with one-word lines & yours are wonderful. Thank you!
Thanks, Linda. I am a fan of one-word lines too!
Lovely. I got to spend the greater part of an afternoon with Lee at an SCBWI conference in Florida. And met his partner Charles. They were so nice to me. Just chatting, it felt like they were old friends from way back. S.
Oooh. I like both just the same methinks! Seeds are mysterious and strong, and the poems you wrote make me think about the seeds that are yet to grow from Lee’s influence on so many. Happy Poetry Friday – see you on Twitter! xx
Thanks, Amy (and for hosting!) Love your take on seeds yet to grow.
How lucky for you, Shutta! I only met Lee via Skype, and a couple of dearone emails… but such a kind person.
Hi dear Buffy
I love everything about this joyful tribute, especially the purple & going for both selections! Lifts me up.
Jan
Thank you, Jan!
Hmm, I can’t pick either. Both are great!
Thanks, Ruth!
Yes, to posting both! Both are wonderful. It’s interesting how different they feel.
They do feel different–and almost identical…
I’m so glad you remembered that this was your blog and you could share both versions! I love the specificity of your words.
Thank you, Molly–it’s sometimes hard to remember that the point of a blog (at least for me) is more play than perfection.
Beautiful, Buffy.
Thanks, Vicky!